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wow!
reading your poetry is a wonderful incident of chance. for like almost two hours now, i've been listening to the senate debate on the resolution pertaining to the attack on iraq; and although i am opening my mind to reasonable arguments supporting an attack, i find none; and thus i remain with my original stand, which is a definite opposition.

i wanted to write poetry, particularly about the lunacy that pervades in our supposed leaders' minds, but poetic words would not flow at the moment, and so i went to the poetry gallery... and then i found your poem.

i like the style that you use for this poem. not only does sound repeat through end rhymes, but actual words repeat, and quite instantaneously. if the subject were something other than war, such style would most likely end-up simply being annoying and elementary, but here, with the matter or war at hand, such repetition becomes an important symbolic element. through "the echoes", one clearly sees the stupidity/lunacy repeating - same atrocities, same destruction, same irrevocable pain caused by a war that would not solve any problems at all.

perhaps one should read your poem tonight after bush performs his speech.
actually, let's skip the speech altogether and read your poem instead

peace, now.
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Wow...long time no poem! Reading this reminds me why I always look forward to seeing your writing.....this is just wonderful!!

I love the repitition of words you used, it sets an almost marchlike cadence to the work. The idea that history's lessons taught nothing, remind me a bit of Nitsche (sp is terrible today..lol)....those who do not learn from history are doomed to repeat it.

This has the same nuclear winter feeling that was so pervasive in the 80's, and ppl should read it to remind themselves about the part of war that is forgotten in the quest for power and glory. This reminds me also of an image that was burned into my mind after visiting Nagasaki and Hiroshima as a kid...the imagery you convey is almost exactly like the museums depictions of the aftermath of the bombs on those two cities.

Just fucking awesome, and a total fave..


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I've only read two of your poems so far but I think I'm going to end up adding you to my dwatch if these keep getting better and better. I like the way you use words like windswept, blistering and ghostly repeatedly. Usually that makes poems seem lifeless but this reminded me of Tanith Lee which is very good, like you she gives amazing imagery. This is also going to be added to my favorites.

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The whole poem and title fit like a glove. The echoing of words from line to line is magnificent! It's also nice to see rhyme presented in a refreshing way...I wonder about the way the "rhyme pendulum" swings with contemporary poetry...I think so many people are afraid of it b/c that's the way most poetry writing starts. Two points:
1) "Blankets of ash on a haunted land
Haunted fields tilled by haunted hands"

In my initial reading of this, my tongue got a bit confused with "fields tilled." It's ok now, but initially it was a bit awkward.

2) "Historic wrongs fade from echoed thoughts
Echoed lessons truly echoed naught"

I often feel the same way, but I'm curious as to if you believe it is possible to learn then from echoed lessons of history at all. And if so, how? And if and when you do, what then becomes your responsibility? (you eople)
There's so much wrong with everything today, and I just wish I could see more visions of paths for creation. Although, acknolwedgement is always a necessary step with healing and creation. Excellent thought-provoking poem.

I would write a long comment on this one, but it seems that just about everything that could be said had in other deviants' long comments. I also wrote a peom concerning the same theme which you can read here: [link] if you get a chance. I got my inspiration from a poem called "end and begining" by Wislawa Szymborska, which is also about the same thing. you should definately read that peom if you haven't already.

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OOOh I thought It's be a Wallpaper!!!

Well Now to be hard on poetry....

hehe

I think you abuse on repeating the same word... use synonyms!!!



and I also recomend you to match all begining sounds either to long or to Short vowel sounds... I believe the 1st paragraph fullfills begining in all short sounds

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I think the overall message to this is so crucially important, that it is easy to forget the horrors of war when the joy and relief of victory has set in. I see it now with the present Iraq situation...winning the war has quickly become justification for the war itself. Damn.